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Eden's Child (Tanka)
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach 
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 . . She was Eden's child If not for temptation's bite Closing garden's gate Watching eternity pass Shedding unborn tears . . Chris Barker March 23, 2004 ~~~~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A very deep and moving write, Chris. You've been doing so very well lately... both with your poetry and in other places  Don't you know how proud I am of you???  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh WOW!! You blew me away with this one Chris! Haunting...very haunting and yet so lovely! Beautifully penned sweet sister. ~Hugs, love and miss ya, Teed~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Karilea & Nancylee....awww, thanks ladies. Wish I could hug you both in person right now.....I feel a little lonely. Not too bad..just you know....you know?  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Thank you for gracing us with this lovely post, Chris! A beauty to behold. Wistful, yet ever-so gentle... Warm hugs, EA |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
She was Eden's child If not for temptation's bite Closing garden's gate Watching eternity pass Shedding unborn tears . . Wilful Giving birth To vision And It's costs dave |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thankyou so much Linda & Dave for reading and commenting. hugs! Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Says everything, doesn't it...such a foundation shaking tale told so simply, completely eloquently... Nice. jwesley |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
the tolls are completely and utterly worth every milasecond.... very much enjoyed |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Jimmy and Lee, I am honoured that you both enjoyed this little piece. Hugs! |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Achingly sad....  ~skyHold on, if you feel like letting go |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
skyshine - thankyou...but...didn't mean to make you sad. hugs! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
beautifully written  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) This is beautifully bittersweet, sweet friend, I felt many emotions reading this from your golden heart, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thankyou so much muted & Noah. Hugs! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Chris These few words are so impactful. I'm impressed! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Martie, dear poetess...I am flattered. Thanks & Hugs! Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Chris, expressed perfectly! |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Chris a very gentle write...beautiful...and so is the picture... Thank you... Goldenrose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I see things like that in the sky too?....(LSD won't hurt ya-won't hurt ya-won't hurt ya)......Nice write...nice pic...(you're pretty nice looking too).... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thankyou poets three! Toe.....ROFL |
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