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One Of Us Is Drowning
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One Of Us Is Drowning |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Up to the surface my submerged tears of grief and disbelief Feel like I’m treading water again gasping, breathless with fears I want you here please don’t come near I don’t want to see your face Your eyes like spies between the waves crashing, crashing shattered Oh yes, I know how the story goes One of us calls the other one rows Was that your voice? Did you just say... No! I don’t want to hear! Plunge you down to the murky depths and pray to my sweet ocean tide please come in and flood the gate please flood in and drown him out Why do you haunt me You came to taunt me Why don’t you just disappear I am the coin at the edge of the well Pick me up and let me go Drop me in and make a wish this time You’ve got nothing left to lose. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Noooooooo! You will not drown! I am sending you a life preserver! Hang on! This "angel" is on her way! Starting a new life is never easy, but that which is worth having, never is, Dear K. Keep strong! Hang on! You have been doing soooo well! This poem is so full of emotion and passion. I can imagine these words just flowed straight from your heart and soul with nary an edit! Indeed, every cloud does have a silver lining! Out of pain comes poetic gain! Loving, comforting, healing hugs, EA |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh my... this hits home *sigh* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Oh yes, I know how the story goes One of us calls the other one rows" sighs. and then we both sink like a stone... oh. heh heh?  that's MY epitaph.  Nicely done, Kahlil. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I am the coin at the edge of the well Pick me up and let me go Drop me in and make a wish this time You’ve got nothing left to lose." Powerful, emotive write! extremely well done! Hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Feel like I’m treading water again gasping, breathless with fears I want you here please don’t come near Excellent write. Enjoyed. Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Thank you so much, all of you. You're my witnesses in letting go...I don't think it will take much longer...And I'm so glad to be here with you... ~K~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wonderfully Done  Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kahlil -- I understand these feelings so well. Good job describing them!  |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Thank you Dark Angel and iliana, for your comments. ~K~ |
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