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Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2004-03-22 08:17 PM

slowly they climb

slowly  they climb,
  those fingers
to my lips, prying loose
the answers
   what i want
and your voice, how it
moves
just below my ribs, off center
i am
  you reach and
hold me
                       up
and we    blend
desires, leaving shadow_sweat
on the tile
where you read my mind
through half moon eyes
color me your blue
  while i press you further
inside through the core
   under the nerves
in your hands
                those afterglow
aftershock
           alter worship
answers ... fall

©snow'04

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

1 posted 2004-03-22 08:28 PM

Dancing on the insides

Considering the outsides

How many hands

Do you count

In your memory

Very good words

Dave

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

2 posted 2004-03-22 08:30 PM

sensual with depth...very nice

marcel
Senior Member

since 2003-03-02

Posts 660
az, usa

3 posted 2004-03-22 08:33 PM

very dreamy and visualistic-----had me hypnotized.........

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

4 posted 2004-03-22 08:41 PM

in your hands
those afterglow
aftershock
alter worship
answers ... fall
....lady snow

great lines

.......
JDW III

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

5 posted 2004-03-22 09:44 PM

yep, this affirms I pretty well look forward to everything you write...wow.

jwesley

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2004-03-22 09:50 PM

Amazing...just amazing!
Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace ~

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

7 posted 2004-03-22 10:18 PM

After worship -- and this was! Very beautiful!

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

8 posted 2004-03-22 11:25 PM

thank you ALL so much!!! i wasn't sure how you all would feel about this one...

dave, your comments are always so thoughtful, thank you!

muted... :-) thank you !

marcel, i'm glad the visuals had that effect.

wolf, you're comments mean a lot thank you !!

jwesley, you humble me so very much!!!

enchantress... i appreciate your thoughts, thank you!

iliana... *smile* thank you!!!
snow

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

9 posted 2004-03-23 02:48 AM

Wow! I love this Snow. This is such a wonderful piece. I am very glad I made it home from South Dakota in time to read this one. Bravo my friend!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

10 posted 2004-03-23 03:07 AM

captivating write!

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

11 posted 2004-03-24 01:52 AM

kevin ... passing shadows..

thank you both so much for your comments!!

snow

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

12 posted 2004-03-24 04:20 PM

Very nice, as someone else said, sensual.

"toss me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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