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second words (inspired by DavePage)
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second words (inspired by DavePage) |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
second words unspoken in reveries of mind; reckoned in confusion, lawless stay of state summon dreams of fancy, hurry doth abate time’s eternal fleeting, leaving loss behind “in pictures of silver, with apples of gold” so quoteth the wise one, great sage of old when words of rejoinder echo second sound and thoughts are commissioned to hearts that abound with pains that are buried like st. patrick spuds in grounds of compassion on chosen timely days deep in our psyches and fixed in our ways flowering into starch-like blossoming buds finding first words that bury their souls leaving their healing to second word goals |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome read my friend. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Steavenr, this summed up what I see in many of Dave's comments -- he does have a way of finding those important words, doesn't he! This was a great poem -- maybe this should be entitled,  ...........jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sometimes Dave's replies are confusing, either that or I just don't have the capacity for them... I hope he doesn't get offended by this...different levels are a good thing great write here, a gift to be treasured |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
nicely done steavenr. enjoyed. Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Chris I love your words Yes I know I shoot from the hip and I know buying "variable focus glasses" was a mistake since now I spent my life with a thin screen a foot or so away, big fonts and a pair of glasses that are basically unusable. I therefore touch type and find microsoft has often re-arranged what I am typing and I dont have or not as the case may be, my glasses on and miss it. Most times I just misunderstand the words. If I offend anyone I apologise but I do spend a lot of my time on my elbow inches from the screen and other times my eyes want to focus from a foot away. Dave |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Dave, no need to apologise I always love your replies, even when I can't understand them. They certainly do not offend me at all. I appreciate you always reading my work  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's a good quality, when one inspires another, that we let them know they did. Just as you have done here... a very good write, Steaven. Thank you. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
My sister, iliana, directed me here to help me understand second words a little better. I'm glad she did. Reading the poem and Dave's response is enlightening. I feel privileged when anyone is involved enough in one of my poems to respond. (I admit, I don't always understand what Dave or others have meant, but am appreciative and inquisitive of their thoughts.) Steavenr, thanks for your inspired piece. ~Sadie~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"Write the second words The first cry out for them Dave" I should have included this with the write, but these are the actual words that inspired the above write...it was such a powerfully haunting reply that it would not leave me alone. Thanks to all who commented |
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