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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2004-01-29 09:58 AM

The lake now whispers with
Low groans of ice
That stutter in cracks of wind
And I try to remember
The liquid sounds of summer
When scant with clothes
We sat along the edge
Speaking our own language
Of sweat
and the tinkle of cubes on glass
underscored in four four time
lazy afternoons

But the memories elude
Wrappings of sentiment
And I listen to frozen splits
Grow longer on the scale
Of this the winter’s skin

At 5 degrees
The vertical sleeps solid
And even ink refuses
To stain the surface
Leaving this the dry spittle of white
To drift on top
Of once warm waves

Now a mist to fog
The mind

And I am

Winter blind

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

1 posted 2004-01-29 10:01 AM

WOW Cpat. Now this is a masterpiece. Wonderfully done. I enjoyed reading this very much. Thank-you!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2004-01-29 10:13 AM

dang, another great write, excellent imagery and metaphor

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2004-01-29 10:22 AM

Ron...YOu made me cold....I've never heard ice talk...but I can imagine it now. Wonderful how you always make that connection between nature and emotion. Well done, as always! Warm hug!

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2004-01-29 10:28 AM

I heard the crunch of ice underfoot...
came to witness the split.

As always, I read with appreciation of your talent.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2004-01-29 10:41 AM

And I try to remember
The liquid sounds of summer
When scant with clothes
We sat along the edge
Speaking our own language
Of sweat

The contrast with such heat just makes the chill go deeper. Excellent write!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2004-01-29 11:22 AM

I was there last night...listening to the shifting ice.
You penned this expertly Captain.
Can't wait for those ice cube melting days now.
Hugs~

~ Is that love I see in your eyes...
or merely a reflection of mine? ~

gadfly4you
Junior Member

since 2004-01-24

Posts 37

7 posted 2004-01-29 11:25 AM

This is magical! Great imagery,
"And I listen to frozen splits
Grow longer on the scale
Of this the winter’s skin"
Thanks!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2004-01-29 01:10 PM

Cpat Hair
Now a mist to fog
The mind
And I am
Winter blind.
Excellent

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

9 posted 2004-01-29 01:38 PM

But the memories elude
Wrappings of sentiment
And I listen to frozen splits
Grow longer on the scale
Of this the winter’s skin

How beautiful!

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

10 posted 2004-01-29 01:51 PM

Being from "Winterpeg" and having to cross a pond to go to school when young, this twigged such wonderful memories for me. This was truly a little piece of "winter bliss."

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

11 posted 2004-01-29 02:14 PM

Your images are so crystal clear cpat,
but this has got to be the perfect cloud cover.

Now a mist to fog
The mind

*enjoyed*

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

12 posted 2004-01-29 06:09 PM

and I loved Sharon's response only I would change the spelling of winter bliss to Wynter Bliss...

This was truly a little piece of "winter bliss."

it sure is good to read you...

M

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

13 posted 2004-01-29 07:57 PM

I think I'm actually warm again.

Thanks Cap.

and btw...

"and the tinkle of cubes on glass
underscored in four four time"

shaking my head, and you still claim you don't dance...

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

14 posted 2004-04-02 04:20 PM

And I try to remember
The liquid sounds of summer
When scant with clothes
We sat along the edge
Speaking our own language
Of sweat
and the tinkle of cubes on glass
underscored in four four time
lazy afternoons

I love the tinkling of cubes....have missed your writes Ron. xx

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

15 posted 2004-04-02 05:10 PM

I loved this...I am glad someone brought it around again, C

M

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

16 posted 2004-04-02 06:21 PM

Gemma, thank you for bringing
this back to the top...

it's a good read...

a very good read.

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