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Starry Eyed
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Starry Eyed |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas 
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If I walked across the stars How long until I reach you? Has the moon seen you pass As it guards the night skies? The sentinel's soliloquy, Enchanting the heavens Does the sun see the moon When it cries [This message has been edited by Krishankins (03-17-2004 11:52 AM).] |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Thought provoking. On the last 2 lines I would read it as you would to someone else to encapsulate the movement and the implied dream. Alternatively allow a blank line in before the last two lines to delimit the break of the flow and effect a change in the ideas of the person reading it. dave |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Good question!... Nice to see you again.  Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Enjoyed this!  |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
short and very sweet |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
GAWD! THIS is awesome! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Krishankins - many thoughts written here... BC |
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