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EternitysHorizon
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Twilight's Orchestra

0 posted 2004-03-10 05:45 PM


NO matter placing first or last
that 1 +++++
   Perfection plus Five
       Achieved
         Blinded Eyes
Why oh Why
   As that became
      The EverAlwaysExpectant
         Mere Starting Point

And How ever How
   Does one ever begin to know
      Where to Begin

To Even warm up

Believe me, no lie
  more a curse
     there is only one mountain completely high

     if people remembered you can only
        climb so high ere you can no longer
               breathe only die

          mountain climbers carry oxygen
            musicians reach for notes
                   so high
              angels fear to fly

               one note just one
                 note higher to
                    Heaven
                   Touching
\                   Forever
                  One Glorious
                     Moment
                  
                   You Know It's
                   Unachievable
                  But Those Five
                 Impossible pluses
                 Never Ever let You
                  Forget the Quest

                    Impossible
                   As Perfection
                    Five Stars
                       Plus                
                 Leads Your Soul To Know
                   Six Has To Exist
                  

"High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy."

© Copyright 2004 AkA Donovan A. Doyle - All Rights Reserved
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Gaia
1 posted 2004-03-10 07:26 PM


just go for it
it's there

Sadelite
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2 posted 2004-03-11 12:57 PM


eh? (a shortened user name-hope it's ok.)
    Isn't this the most?   I tried to copy your poem in different parts, but didn't place it here before losing it all.  I totally identify with this, but now at work I find myself sloughing in apathy, which is a real  disappointment when I know I should be more motivated to do my best.  (I referred a little to quality in a fairly recent poem, What Happened to Outstanding.  I know I should work for that sixth star, but find I deserve a B- on some things, a real bummer.  Thank you for addressing this topic.  I'llread this again for inspiration.  I hope more people check this out.  It is well worth it.
    Do I know you?  
                    Sadelite

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3 posted 2004-03-11 03:34 AM


this is so true!

excellent write!

Grover
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4 posted 2004-03-19 06:27 PM


Interesting write.
iliana
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5 posted 2004-03-19 07:40 PM


I liked this -- I have to add that I really felt an ascension with the words, as if they were getting higher on a pitch scale -- as if they were climbing -- good effect.
Sadelite
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6 posted 2004-03-25 03:44 PM


I was thumbing through, hunting for something and I found this.  I don't think I have it in my library, so, please forgive me as I check it out now, and in doing so, have to send this to the top again.
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7 posted 2004-03-25 03:51 PM



...only one mountain completely high...

where rare air chairs the ledge
here I sit, upon the edge,
questioning gambits
that led me here,
thinking clear, on echoes' air...

where edelweis bends, winks
toward the sun
following by face it's value
of one
never questioning but always in seek
what gift, edelweis,
as it peeks
and plays to dance with air,
so rare the majesty of white it bears...

...only one mountain completely high...
and I would dwell,
as if to touch
your sky...

Enchantress
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8 posted 2004-03-25 05:00 PM


Extremely well done and very interesting.
Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
   Has held me in the same embrace ~

EternitysHorizon
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Twilight's Orchestra
9 posted 2004-03-25 08:39 PM


Thanks all for the kind words
and for Sunshine: thy response is lovely and inspiring sooooooooooooooooooooooo
here we go

A bit of history-

When young moving to yet another school
new band director to me at least outside
was organizing student musicians competition
wise sixteen in a hotel suite wailing trumpet

when "regulars" arrived as the director wanted to know who was blowing the guests ears in a converted rehearsal room "Just me"
I frowned "its my warm-up routine" being

the eternal new-kid chastising from peers
appeared which led my defiant nature to resume with increased vigor and pointedly
sharply higher realms just because I can

till the director himself showed himself
proclaiming "you're blowing the roof off the
hotel" to which I replied "I'm just warming up wait till we start to really play"

To which he just shook his head, smiled and closed the door proceeding we as a symphony
sat to play in contest to my delight hearing
the director say why can I hear one single

trumpet above this entire orchestra and his challenge to rise to the intensity of this
bad-boy horn player who can never play high
intense enough bad boys light fuses at time

we can all use
and to this day I shy away
from any guitar that is not double octaved
One needs those extra notes to make it soar

When not playing in tears compliment
Balancing the soft subtle dreamy quiet
with the ever rising ever encompassing
before falling slowly back silent heartbeat

"High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy."

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