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Open Poetry #31

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Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2004-03-03 09:50 AM

clutching the air around
in all its musty stale
I have cocooned myself
from scathing memories
who hauntingly linger
like spiders guarding webs

surely they realize
that at some spot in time
in order to subsist
I must indulge in renting
a small profligate gap
to let gasps of fresh air

in the ensuing act
of my grab at new warmth
they will clearly notice
the cracks in the thick shield
and stab through the thin scabs
of painful years gone by

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

1 posted 2004-03-03 10:01 AM

"And stab through the thin scabs
of painful years gone by"

Wonderful ending to a truly tantalising poem. I think this may be the first I have read of yours and I'm really loving the style!! Brilliant write.

^*Kimberley*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2004-03-03 11:19 AM

well for me, I have lived this over and over :

clutching the air around
in all its musty stale
I have cocooned myself
from scathing memories
who hauntingly linger
like spiders guarding webs

nicely done
*s
M

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-03-03 11:25 AM

this was an intense read and write, gripped the reader and held attention to every word.
Wonderful

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2004-03-03 06:02 PM

in the ensuing act
of my grab at new warmth
they will clearly notice
the cracks in the thick shield
and stab through the thin scabs
of painful years gone by

Excellent Sudi

NIce to read you dear.

M

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

5 posted 2004-03-05 08:12 AM

your visiting this one and your responses are all very much appreciated, my friends...

Thank you very much...

regards
sudhir

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