Open Poetry #31 |
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where once was forever (Edder&snow) |
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Snow![]()
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain ![]() |
an Edder/Snow duet where once was forever there's a promise beneath the moon found at the altar in your eyes there hope stirs in restless sleep and alone falls to dreams of you what once was forever is... tender whispers grace- memories scattered on pebbled pathways and the ink of tears drying upon skin turned ash in the fires of your stare bittersweet love ...an imprint on a pillow, named for you ©Ed&Snow "yet each man kills the thing he loves |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I knew this was going to be good when I saw the names. *S* Your words are woven well in this forlorn beauty... great job! |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
"and the ink of tears drying" ![]() It does seem as though tears stain, and smiles wash out!! Everyone notices the tracks of tears but nobody can tell if you've just been smiling! hehe Wonderful poem! ^*Kimberley*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"hope stirs in restless sleep and alone falls to dreams of you" Very well done. Those lines are my favorite. ![]() "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
nicely penned, you two... regards sudhir |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LadySnow and Ed~ This is sheer beauty in it's entirety~ 'there's a promise beneath the moon found at the altar in your eyes' ... and this just wormed it's way right into my heart~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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muted![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Snow, Ed told me he was having trouble with his muse, I think he was wrong! You two really do make a fantastic duet....the flow, the emotion, imagery.....bravo!! Hope to see more of Ed, and certainly always looking forward to your writings snow (especially the ones you read out for us) ![]() |
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