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Bits of Stone and Light |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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I wanted to leave--you, sleeping with such peace- I imagined your skin hour upon hour dreaming in reason leaving the tale of you and I behind-- As the world held water I could almost feel each drop settling among my palms -- What I would tell you? the first time will burn me in bits of stone and light that I could picture myself among your slumber while the rain is somewhere lost at sea so: I begin to read softly little words, a thousand words full of moonlight - the sound of water - my interest of star and earth ~ What dawn brings, the night will not let go- wind, maybe rain, will be my escape shapeless as their shadows and you dream my hands will once again rest on your shoulders - our lips will touch as soft as a breeze the walls not guarded falling like leaves I wake remembering your eyes will hold the fall of me with your silence I wanted to leave-- you, somewhere between blue and amber melting in the down-pours So again, I began to read: I too, remember the ache of ice ~~**~~ There are moments when speech is but a mouth pressed lightly and humbly against the angel's hands. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this one in going in my library the awesome ache that I can feel...yes, I can relate |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"your eyes will hold the fall of me" Gawd Lauren...I was about to copy and paste the entire piece! This is incredibly beautiful..but then, so is everything you pen. ~Hugs pretty lady~
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
your critique line..says be kind... and there is nothing in this I see that would justify anyone being anything but kind.. as always my friend, well written... touching..and felt here.. bravo... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"I wanted to leave-- you, somewhere between blue and amber melting in the down-pours"  (big angel hugs) Awwwwwwwww, this is sad but as always your gorgeous words cascade with colors and prisms that make the falling feel so peaceful, God Bless You, you are always a joy to read, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I wanted to leave--you, sleeping with such peace- I imagined your skin hour upon hour dreaming in reason leaving the tale of you and I behind-- As the world held water I could almost feel each drop settling among my palms -- What I would tell you? the first time will burn me in bits of stone and light that I could picture myself among your slumber while the rain is somewhere lost at sea so: I begin to read softly little words, a thousand words full of moonlight - the sound of water - my interest of star and earth ~ What dawn brings, the night will not let go- wind, maybe rain, will be my escape shapeless as their shadows and you dream my hands will once again rest on your shoulders - our lips will touch as soft as a breeze the walls not guarded falling like leaves I wake remembering your eyes will hold the fall of me with your silence I wanted to leave-- you, somewhere between blue and amber melting in the down-pours ================================ omg .............. I'm putty....... moth putty............ weak kneed ... teary eyed ... putty... Lord girl...your timing is uncanny... my own dreams of late have been haunting me like a beautiful curse... once again you write the words my heart feels but my muse no longer allows me... the butterflies must be fluttering in anticipation of spring.  this is such a stunning write of high inspire Lauren...your poetry takes my breath away. * library* Through the water ... through the rain ... to the soul of everything Wash my heart out on the stones ... and I'm almost gone. David Gray |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Once again... teach me? |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
youve left me breathless and speachless, beautiful is not a strong enough word, but its the only one i have at the moment!! |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
A heartfelt and eloquent write. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren This is exquisite! |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very well written! You are a gifted writer! Grover. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I have said it before.....only you..our Lauren can write like this. Simply awesome. hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Lauren - this is a fantastic poem with soooo very much feeling and powerful imagery - I loved it - Paul |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
needed to read this beauty again ~*~ What dawn brings, the night will not let go- ~*~ I wake remembering your eyes will hold the fall of me with your silence ~*~ I wanted to leave-- you, somewhere between blue and amber ~*~ Through the water ... through the rain ... to the soul of everything |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
the walls not guarded falling like leaves Oh I love this image. Wonderful! Maree Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"What dawn brings, the night will not let go- wind, maybe rain, will be my escape shapeless as their shadows" Gorgeous lines above!  ..jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
stunning! I wanted to clap but it seemed too raucous a response. I'll toss the metaphorical rose, then. Loved this Lauren. |
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