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and in squint of her |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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There is a war the clouds came out to play all cryptic-like and huddled together like the few thousand of us bobbing around Maggie and a tasseled blanket were my only comfort we were separated from our clan and had to make do with the warmth of our bodies sharing one blanket which wrapped around the terror that exploded our bones and we couldn’t prove the weak we felt alone but happy that we had one another lip-locked and trembling within the nest of people all tree-like fruity and flowered bobbing up bobbing down some even resembled vegetables this was our garden our new home our sanity crouched down between the black and white of war where the faint familiarity of innocence appeared within the pull of forgiveness my eyes left Maggie for a moment her sun in my eyes and in squint of her followed the crack in concrete finding you in the back-ground sitting crooked in your little pumpkin patch mocking me… my immortal Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. (by Virginia Woolf) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and we couldn’t prove the weak ~*~ Teach me. Good muses... and a wow... |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
An exhilarating read! Grover. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree You define original and mix it with touching...great poetry!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...intense |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
this was our garden our new home our sanity crouched down between the black and white of war where the faint familiarity of innocence appeared within the pull of forgiveness my eyes left Maggie for a moment her sun in my eyes and in squint of her followed the crack in concrete finding you in the back-ground sitting crooked in your little pumpkin patch mocking me… my immortal as usual... both moved and impressed.. |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
I enjoyed this VERY much. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Fine writing..with depth of thought..and feeling.. Thank you for your words... Goldenrose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Nice squinting there. Got yerself an old world feel going. Nice! |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Rather cryptic and yet so full of meaning... wonderfully done. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey Luscious.  This has a feeling of safe haven and innocence--I would love to know the source of your inspiration on this. A cozy read and very touching, m'friend.  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
and we couldn’t prove the weak we felt alone but happy that we had one another ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Just knowing someone cares enough to be there is enough! So sweet, Maree~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
You've done a really fine job with it Mmy. Very very impressive. hugs and then a few more JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Karilea?  Thank youThank you Grover. Martie? Thank youPassing Shadows.. thanks for the Wow. Capt, always lovely to hear from you, I thank you. dingusjr, glad you enjoyed, thank you. Goldenrose, thank you for your lovely words. Ed, yup it seems I have, thanks for stopping by sea_of_okc, thank you so much. Karen, thanks Gorgeous.. check your email.  Ms Blues, thanks for your lovely reply and the "so sweet: Hey Jamsey, thanks m'friend back at yaThank you all so very much, your time and comments mean so much. Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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