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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-02-29 06:13 AM


I spent the day in remembrances
until we reached the end and she said
"You know what I really want...
An Eulogy" as my mind raced forward
to its meaning then backwords over substance
trying to mask the surprise in my voice
and block the pains from being more
than just my aching back stabbing at me.

And so another promise to fulfill
when next we meet, with her words,
mixed with mine, maybe in some sort of
patterned rhyme.
For she said to me she doesn't want
to be visited at a graveside,
but rather "in the heart".

M

*some days I need more than the empty house and a scream.


"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)


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1 posted 2004-02-29 08:56 AM


For there she will be with you always...

This touched me deeply.

passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2004-02-29 02:19 PM


just touching...very heartfelt
KoKo
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Inside the shadow's shadow
3 posted 2004-02-29 03:48 PM


This was....beautiful.  I can't think of anything better to say.
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-02-29 03:53 PM


Maureen?


iliana
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5 posted 2004-02-29 04:30 PM


And with this poem, that is accomplished.
ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
6 posted 2004-02-29 04:49 PM


Love that ending Maureen......Nicely done

Eric

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
7 posted 2004-03-14 05:42 PM


Thank you all for caring~~

hugs
M

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