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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Snowflakes were falling There in the air, fluttering through Dark of morn, Again In cavort of Look at me I am still here But only barely Like shadows under foam And images in coffee brew A glance up under lids of shy Only barely there… As if they pretended to be But a passing thought Through a brief glance No substance, Just dancing… Look at me, I am still here, But only barely. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Only barely there… As if they pretended to be But a passing thought Through a brief glance passing thoughts and brief glances are sometimes longer then we might even know them to be, much longer....smiles and hugs....wonderful write Sunshine |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"No substance, Just dancing… Look at me, I am still here, But only barely." Karilea...you 'danced' beeautifully through this piece. Much deeper thoughts on the second read... Much enjoyed. Hugs~
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
But only barely...Winter hangs on just barely. Beautiful Karilea. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Beautiful my friend. Very soft....very quiet..much like this morning. hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
jaw hitting ground... speechless...  It's better than I could have planned.. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea The snow may be just barely, but this speaks to me of deeper things, quietly, and just loud enough!  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
So light, airy, whimsical ~ and delightful!  Love & Light, Linda |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Look at me, I am still here, But only barely. you're right Karilea, I do understand becasue it's how I feel. M Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Look at me, I am still here, But only barely (smiling) a feeling to well known and too close to the truth to be made lightly... your words are substantial.... |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
And, I am so glad you are here. |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
Somtimes lead our only viewpoint UP Tarry not on the stinging cold ground staff in hand walk past mundane wrenching foothills encompassing scurrying lost Hurry past vendors trinkets antiquities charms all useless moment to pray moment to say lift me to the mountaintop amidst air so fine it has held your true mirror always no time exists where all the world lighted seen clear creation understanding every dream awaits thy private reading where ice melts into warming cups rejoining body to soul to life ask thee only a hand guide lift beyond what has ever been awaits pateiently mere asking one step from bottom to top again where no time could impede a simple hand up languish momentarily changing snowflakes for stardust dancing ringlets in your hair ye need only reach to ask whisked there Eternal Horizon God's rarified air where judgement lives not and the summer sun sun warms the highest summit with the slightest teardrop never disregarded unheard awakening mountain minstrels who will neer cease their playing til you have rejoined all that is life all that is sight seeing to recognition not failings only your light Divine Where rainbow touches earth gentlest |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Look at me, I am still here, But only barely. May I adopt this as my signature? A good poem for me to read, today or any day...Here, I have Orange County Snow... /pip/Forum76/HTML/002953.html That used to bring me joy, but today even a rain of flower petals seems drab to me... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
amazing write, from the grace of heart...lovely Karilea~ ~~**~~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your ending seems to strike a chord of knowing with many of us. *S* Excellent write! |
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