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Forlorn Future |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Dispensable Disposable Not needed any more These words have echoed in my head Since you walked out the door. Inferior Exterior I’ll admit I possess But if I were given the chance I’d show you happiness But she’s your need So as I plead I see your ears are deaf I’ve tossed aside my pride and now I’m kneeling here, bereft To contemplate My lonely fate Devoid of hope and trust It’s hell to go on without dreams But now I know I must Resignation And frustration Will be my daily guides Until the day (if it should come) When this heartache subsides |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Geez suthern I feel the need to give you a big hug...  You have captured the feelings after a rejection all too well. If this is from your heart I hope you will heal soon and realize how special and valuable you truly are. At the very least you know you are loved and wanted here! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I guess one consolation is that the heartache will subside...the other would be that this is an powerful write, even in its quiet sadness, it shouts with emotions |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
sea: That sounds like a good idea to me... it's been far too long since you've been around. *S* Thank you for your kind comments... while rejection and I are old pals, I'm just playing with words. *S* And whether PIP loves and wants me or not... y'all are stuck with me! *S* jellybeans: Subtlety has never been my strong point. *S* Thank you so much, dear lady... I know you know more about heartache than I ever want to know. *S* |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
southern, I'm known to be cut and dry, but also possess a big heart...so in this I'm going to take the liberty to say...if by chance things would have worked out, perhaps it wouldn't have been right...and there would be a whole lot of other hurt and despair...so if this is about you, or a friend...think of the fact that nobody did anything wrong, it was that you were wrong for each other, and perhaps your wearing the better shoes for a very long and interesting walk into the future? Yes? Hugs to you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Lee: Your big heart is definitely showing... and I appreciate your words so much! *S* I was looking for film this morning and found words instead... my little slips of paper are everywhere. *S* Those words were written during dark times... but this poem is mostly word play... I'm more the lock onto his ankle, refuse to let go, and hope he tires of dragging me type. *G* |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Well written poem! Grover. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wow suthern...this is so well written. I'm glad it's not what you're feeling now.. Oh heck...I'll send you a hug anyway!  Well done pretty lady~ ~ Can I keep you? ~ |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hey suthern lady,  I was so glad to read in your replies that this isn't the way you are feeling now. I am sooooo glad that it's not!! And, about the word play in the poem....it's great!! I love the rhyme scheme that you used in this one, too. Really awesome writing, my friend.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, there be far too many of us who have felt this way at one time or another in our lives! I was pleased to read in one of your responses that those times have passed for you! ~ as they too have passed for me!  You are one big, beautiful emoticon! You write with such feeling and always manage to strike a chord in the hearts of your faithful fans!  Love & Light, EA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Ones poison is anothers candy. Great write. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dear heart, it does subside over time. And yeah, the darn thing hurts... Well written Suthern... |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I understand where you are coming form, Suthern gal. I have felt this way myself. And, still do at times. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ah yes, I do know this feeling -- I've had it a few times and I've caused it a few times as well. But don't hang your head, Laura...there are many ways in which you're second to none. If they don't see 'em, it's their loss. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
suthern Hurt ache sure comes through in this well done poem. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Inferior Exterior I’ll admit I possess But if I were given the chance I’d show you happiness" It has been my experience that anyone that intentionally tries to make another feel like that is incapable of being happy. And I am thankful I am not them.  I enjoyed this more than you can know. "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This kicks... well done, suthern. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
you just wrote how I feel many days of my own life! Well done Suthern gal. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
For me anyway, I have found that even when I don’t think I’m writing about something I am feeling personally, many times, there is at least a little bit of truth tucked in there somewhere... Big hugs to you Suthern if your actually not feeling this right now And even bigger ones, if you are |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh dear...  ...this cries inside me |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh sweetie, i feel this one soooo deeply...my heart aches reading this..i hope that you will heal |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Such sadness..the writing shows the empty feeling you have been left with....makes me very sad for you..but in a strange way you bring the reader closer to you...you reach out your hand for help..i extend it back to you with heartfelt friendship Suthern... keep well.... Golderose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
You have so much to offer "S"...I could reach over myself and give ya a hug! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Grover: Thank you very much! *S* Enchantress: Hugs are always needed and appreciated. *S* Thank you very much! *S* garysgirl: Both my wordplay and rhyme scheme are grateful to you, sweet lady. *S* Thank you very much. *S* EA: I have missed your kindnesses so very much… thank you! *S* Seymour: I seem to make them sick either way? LOL Thank you so much, my friend. *S* Magnus: And then it just goes and finds hurt again when it heals. *S* Thank you very much! *S* Smart Chick: It’s a miserable feeling… I hope you don’t again. *S* Thank you very much! *S* Ratleader: It is so good to see your response, my friend… talk about loss… you are sorely missed. *S* Thank you so much! *S* Martie: I’ve known it a few times. *S* Thank you very much! *S* Susan: Thank you very much for enjoying… and for sharing that perspective! *S* Sunshine: Ahhh… now I know where these bruises came from. LOL Thank you! *S* GS: It’s the pits, isn’t it? *S* Hope plenty of better times are ahead for you, sweet lady… thank you! *S* Richy: You’re far too perceptive, my friend. *S* Thank you so very much! *S* I’ll take those hugs! *S* PS: I’d never have wanted to cause you more tears… but thank you! *S* muted: Thank you so very much, dear lady. *S* Goldenrose: What a wonderful response! *S* Thank you so very much… You’ve given me a smile this morning! *S* dingusjr: I’d take it, too! *S* Thank you so very much… your kindness is greatly appreciated! *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernLady~ Look at the beautiful spirit of you, word-playing~ A little 'play', a little 'reality' and ya' just come up with ORIGINALITY~ LOVE IT~ *Huglets* ~*Me ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Marge: You are dear... I thank you so much! *S* |
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