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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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As first searing breath Enters lungs Accustomed to water As sea creature Crawls onto shore I am becoming Something more. As chemo stings and Burns frail veins Cancerous hatred Is destroyed So through this pain I'm free again To know trust. As toddlers stumble Stagger and fall I am just now Learning to crawl But I believe One day I will stand Worthy, perhaps Of clasping your hand. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
A goal we all strive for, and so humbly admit that we are doing just that...Nicely said... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
As toddlers stumble Stagger and fall I am just now Learning to crawl But I believe One day I will stand Worthy, perhaps Of clasping your hand. even though we're adults we still learn and grow...which gives great meaning to our lives...even in the pain...beautifully written and expressed. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
suthern There is much strength in this!  |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
You are worthy now in my opinion "S". Enjoyed the poem.........Larry |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I liked your metaphors very much. I found myself reading several times in thought. Thank you for posting this. sadelite |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I really liked the way you ended this, and being worthy of the clasp! Nice writing suthern gal~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Not, are you worthy enough to clasp my hand, but am I worthy enough to have my hand clasped by you... Well written, my friend. jwesley |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
suthern You will never know how deeply your words touched me this day. I can so relate to this. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Powerfully written...a strong message here. Heart Hugs dear lady~ ~ Whatever our souls are made of, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
All I can say is that the sea-creatures had a much longer time to evolve than us poor humans who only have a lifetime to know complete trust... So very good, suthern. Very, very good! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love to read you...always |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
great write lady, I love the strength with which you deliver the ending  you deserve a hand to hold |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
This is so powerful...and moving. Eric |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Belle, YOU m'dear, are "evloving" into a wise and philosophical poetess supreme!  Love & Light, EA |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Magnus: And if we ever forget that humility, a stumble or two will remind us. *S* Thank you very much! *S* LeeJ: And there is pain… we’ve farther to fall and aren’t as easily appeased or distracted. *S* Thank you so much! *S* Martie: Thank you for seeing it. *S* And thanks for the hug! *S* dingusjr: What a kind thing to say… thank you very much! *S* Sadelite: If I could send a response to my library, I’d send yours. *G* No one… but NO one… has ever told me they liked my metaphors! *G* Thank you very much for this exception. *S* Blues: There are some clasps I’ll never feel worthy of… but that won’t stop me from reaching. *S* Thank you so much! *S* jwesley: I like that revision… even if I may never think that way! *S* Thank you so much! *S* Suetang: I don’t think a writer can ask for more… than to touch a reader. Thank you so much! *S* Enchantress: Hugs are definitely appreciated… thank you so much ! *S* Sunshine: And what’s so unfair is that it can be destroyed in an instant. *S* Thank you so much! *S* PS: I appreciate that so much, dear lady… always. *S* Thank you!!! jellybeans: I think maybe I do. *S* And you’re one of the few that know what progress that is! LOL Thank you so much, my friend! *S* Ericc: That’s very kind of you… thank you! *S* EA: If I am, it’s cause I hitched a ride on your wings. *S* Thank you so much, my friend! *S* |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Such humble determination and strength here... Takes alot to have that, seems you've already gone quite a ways Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
I enjoyed your poem Ruth I just hope everything's okay? Know that my thoughts are with you okay... Hugs, Richy |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
you know, i keep falling too and bruising my knees...maybe you wouldnt mind letting me learn to walk with you a journey is always better when shared..and so many of us here want to share with you...you are such a lovely poet...  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
GG: There's still such a long way to go. *S* Thank you so very much! *S* Richy: I appreciate you so much, my friend. *S* I'm glad you liked... thank you so much... for everything. *S* muted: What a wonderful response. *S* I thank you so much, dear lady... and would be honored to walk... or crawl... with you. *S* |
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