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Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

0 posted 2004-02-21 08:30 AM

Sickly sweet
love encircles my soul.
Pink promises
suffocating, aggravating.
Entrapment,
too strong
to hold onto.
And for one mindless minute..
I pray for the dark.

Winter prevails
Bleak black clouds, Blackened.
The sultry dim moonlight
dancing with the stars.
The blistering cold
of the night draws near.
I stand
in this unenchanting place
and wonder
when will I see the Sun.

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

1 posted 2004-02-21 08:35 AM

I've had these thoughts before, but could never have realized what they were until I read it from your words. Very well expressed! Thank you.
Sadelite

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-02-21 01:29 PM

Kim, this is one that I can relate to well. I know you have read some of my poems and know how I feel about things, so you should know that I love this piece!

I have been there, still visit regularly, and I wonder about the sun too.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2004-02-21 01:38 PM

(big angel hugs) Oh Kimberley, always hold faith close to your heart and the darkness shall eclipse into brightest light, dearest friend, God Bless You, you speak with true heart and emotion, I send angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kimberley, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2004-02-25 07:59 AM

Kim in all honesty I can say that I too have stood in this spot. Very well written full of feeling.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2004-02-25 11:57 AM

"The sultry dim moonlight"

excellent line.

excellent poem.

"sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.."
~Dido~

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

6 posted 2004-03-03 07:22 AM

Thankyou everyone for your feedback...
I have been absent from passions for a while as I'm now at University and my phoneline in the halls charges way too much for the internet.
Fortunately I'm back.
Its so nice to know that I've still got people who care enough to read my poetry.

Thanks again

*hugs you all*

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

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