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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2004-02-20 12:36 PM

I hide your name in letters
               even air has weight
if I touch air
float my fingers through it
does it reach you?

We, no longer     lovers
    testing time and distance
in some unexpressed touch
I still ache to feel

I close my eyes
letting  snow surround me
silently it falls
and I, like a child,
try to catch each flake upon my tongue
to taste the memory of you

once among them, I saw pure white

I wanted to enter that world
that place  above   s p r e a d i n g   s k y
to look down and over the lights of  city

in shades of hollow       I heard your voice
gentle and serene       no color
my dreams underwater
between horizons - left behind

you're searching for smaller things
boxes of broken edges --
light against  walls,
                       captured where you stood--
through ashes   watching    gray
hit          the floor

the earth moved  & I thought of you --
of fate sometimes and what
it means   to renew

I am here again
waiting for a whisper     where
corners bend

tapping  all     shadows to

return your   soul

~~
toujours l'amour

~~**~~
There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands.

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

1 posted 2004-02-20 01:04 AM

Lauren, this was just lovely
Poetry just doesn’t get much better
then this

“I hide your name in letters
even air has weight
if I touch air
float my fingers through it
does it reach you? “

“I close my eyes
letting snow surround me
silently it falls
and I, like a child,
try to catch each flake upon my tongue
to taste the memory of you “

“I am here again
waiting for a whisper where
corners bend

tapping all shadows to

return your soul”

Beautiful Lauren!

Richy

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2004-02-20 08:17 AM

We, no longer     lovers
    testing time and distance
in some unexpressed touch
I still ache to feel

I close my eyes
letting  snow surround me
silently it falls
and I, like a child,
try to catch each flake upon my tongue
to taste the memory of you

once among them, I saw pure white

I wanted to enter that world
that place  above   s p r e a d i n g   s k y
to look down and over the lights of  city

in shades of hollow       I heard your voice
gentle and serene       no color
my dreams underwater
between horizons - left behind
================================

oh my oh my ...

I hide your name in letters

if I touch air
float my fingers through it
does it reach you?

yeeessssss

*sigh*

once among them, I saw pure white

yeeessssss ... exactly

                         ~*~

Well I cant say what I might believe ...
but if God made you ... he's in love with me.

5 for fighting

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2004-02-20 08:37 AM

beautiful as always....

truly a pleasure to read you..always is..

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2004-02-20 08:38 AM

I applaud this outstanding write L~ You write so much that I love, but this held me spellbound in the eloquence of this lovely poem.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2004-02-20 08:41 AM

Lauren, this was written with elegance and beauty...just b/c people do not compliment our dreams, souls, wants, desires, doesn't mean that we didn't or don't love them, just means there was not a common foundation to build on which would have tore the relationship apart eventually. We tend to gravitate towards those who think and feel the same way as we do...and needs in our lives to progress, doesn't mean anyone was wrong...it was just one of those things.

This is what I see in your words, a very responsible, mature and gracious was to view a lost love. Beautiful!

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

6 posted 2004-02-20 09:39 AM

enjoyed

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2004-02-20 10:09 AM

I wanted to enter that world
that place  above   s p r e a d i n g   s k y
to look down and over the lights of  city

in shades of hollow       I heard your voice
gentle and serene       no color
my dreams underwater
between horizons - left behind

~*~

And JanetMarie's photo surely compliments this piece of art...

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

8 posted 2004-02-26 09:55 AM

This poem is a rare gem greeneyes....it is poetry of deep love....endlessy deep..it speaks of love with rich tapestries of passion and emotion....the snow scene is my favourite...what would you look like with the snow falling on you i wonder?....

Thank you for the words...

Goldenrose.

''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity''

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

9 posted 2004-02-26 10:17 AM

Stunning!

Eric

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

10 posted 2004-02-28 04:43 PM

(sigh) Don't stay in the shadows too long or you may lose sight of where the light between them all are, dearest friend, my heart feels for your tears and I hope you find all you're looking for, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

11 posted 2004-02-28 04:46 PM

"I wanted to enter that world
that place  above   s p r e a d i n g   s k y
to look down and over the lights of  city

in shades of hollow       I heard your voice
gentle and serene       no color
my dreams underwater
between horizons - left behind"

My gosh Lauren...this is SO beautiful!!
Hugs pretty lady~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

Mt Rowley
Junior Member

since 2004-01-06

Posts 25
United Kingdom

12 posted 2004-02-28 06:59 PM

I rarely have the patience to read the poetry of others and as such hardly ever enjoy it, but reading this was truely an experience of enjoyment. thanks for sharing this...

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

13 posted 2004-02-29 05:15 PM

....sigh....

Serena Renae
Junior Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 48
Ohio, USA

14 posted 2004-02-29 07:23 PM

You performed magic with this one..it came alive as I read it. Very captivating.
Love, Serena

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

15 posted 2004-03-01 04:45 AM

I'm in awe...just a stunningly beautiful write!

dingusjr
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

16 posted 2004-03-01 05:07 AM

Add me the list of those impressed.
VERY NICE...MOVING.

HopeS
Member Elite

since 2000-12-22

Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia

17 posted 2004-03-01 06:01 AM

Longing wrote stunningly beautiful

Hope

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

18 posted 2004-03-01 05:31 PM

I liked your poem alot.

Juju

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

19 posted 2004-03-04 12:05 PM

in shades of hollow       I heard your voice
gentle and serene       no color
my dreams underwater
between horizons - left behind

Such sentimental beauty, Lauren.
I can almost hear your heart beating across the sea.
Love ya deary~

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

20 posted 2004-03-04 01:04 AM

"the earth moved  & I thought of you --
of fate sometimes and what
it means   to renew"

I really enjoyed the motion (as well as the words) in this one.  Very lovely, Lauren!

jo

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