Just Waiting For(Does Life Relate?)

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Teen Poetry #7

Just Waiting For(Does Life Relate?)

Deep_Inside
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

0 posted 2004-03-23 06:04 AM

I can't write at this time
My mind hasn't slept in days
My subconscious is tormenting me
In a hundred different ways

My thoughts don't listen to me
And the last time everything was this scattered
I went out of my mind
As my entire being was shattered

I don’t like sitting in limbo
Just waiting for………
And I don’t know what
But at the end I asked for more

The pain that consumes me
When ever I start to slip away
Just makes me recede in my mind
And latches on to stay

Seen as a welcome comfort
Time to relax at a pleasant place
It’s just my own illusion
A big excuse to cover my face

Now I live without the mask
I see the entire road in fount of me
Its not that I can tell the future
But I know it's all reality

Man I hate just waiting
With my mind searching for more
I hope there is a time for me other than
Just waiting for………..

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

1 posted 2004-03-23 09:14 PM

i liked the boldened parts. i would advise you to take out the "man" and casual words like that. it's a good poem though, especially with the words in bold. good work.
-alex

now im alone, but not lonely like before

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