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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is a vent about my now ex b/f who dumped me today because he doesnt have a car any more, and cant get out to see me any more..... sorry this is not really very good... i just needed a vent for these emotions that have being building up inside me all day you think your doing the right thing but your not tou dont realise how much pain your putting me through youve ripped my heart youve torn my soul youve done the thing you said you would not do you have broken my heart you have shredded it into millions of pieces you broke your promise and made me cry you were my everything you were the reason i was breathing now my oxygen has been taken from me how am i to live how am i to continue what will i do i dont want any other i just wawnt you why cant you realise i dont care if you have a car or not i dont care if your flat broke i dont care where you are living the only thing i care about is you and you alone you are my light and that has been stolen from me you were my life and that seems dull and boring with out you around tonight your killing me with your words your killing me by trying to do the 'right' thing you are so scared of your feelings you would think im going to dump you at the slightest thing wrong im not like that im not like your last girl i dont want to hurt you i dont want to kill your heart again like she did any feed back on this is most apreciated and any quick fixes for getting over the love of your life who dumps you is most apreciated. cheers Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
hmm...well, for starters, i really loved this poem, because i can relate so well to it at this point in my life. Which totally freaks me out, but anyways.... The only thyng i could thing of to improve, would be descritptions, and maybe some metaphors or similies in there... Wow...i cannot get over how much i can relate to this right now. It's sorta creepy...~lol~ Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
thanks for replying kissa.... this was more of a vent as a siad at the start of the poem and i really just wanted to get my emotions out and onto paper without really using to many metaphors and stuff..... but thankyou for your reply and any advice on getting over the love of your life that you have would be seriously apreciated. cheers Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
the only thing i can think of to help you get over him, is to talk about it, and just try to think of all the good times, and look at it as a lesson in life, and a gain, not a loss. I dont know if that will help much, i am in the mddle of trying to do the exact same thing... He is scared, and he thinks i will dump him, or cheat on him. And this last weekend he got really mad, and jealous over nothing. I liked his best freind a loooong time ago in like feb. and he still thinks i like him, because he saw this thing in a old journal that said "{I LOVE NICK) and he jsut sorta got really different after that. Which is stupd i think, but if you ever want to talk, feel free to email me, i know i could use someone to talk to right now.... My email is: [email protected] Okay, well i look forward to talking to you... Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
It's great that you can just get your feelings down on paper and just vent...  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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