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Teen Poetry #7

silent eyes

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-02-23 06:21 PM

silent eyes

You've poured burning water down my throat,
To quiet the apologies spewing forth,
So i write them down in a folded note
And you'll burn my hands together to make one.
Only my eyes can communicate love for you
But you'll take those too by spitting in my eyes.
Oxidized thoughts below this slient yew
Eat away at it's core, burning it away.
Many times i'll look in my own mind
To find ha*e hovering round your name,
But inside my heart remains love in kindFor all the years i've carried you.
If you stop blowing dissension
The storms will pass us soon.
And this human colored skin causes intervention,
But it's never enough to fully understand.
And i'll write these simple words
Knowing all along that it's so forced.
I wish we had sometime heard
That we'll never make it back, never make it back.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

1 posted 2004-02-24 11:53 AM

I quite liked this, but as with every poem, a few lines always jump out..

You've poured burning water down my throat,
To quiet the apologies spewing forth

as well as...

If you stop blowing dissension
The storms will pass us soon.

Overall, nice.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-02-25 05:15 PM

thanks allyssa!

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