»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #7
»
Hopes In Old Dreams
| Teen Poetry #7 |
|
Hopes In Old Dreams |
|
|
Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
when you live you begin to die |
||
| © Copyright 2004 Matt - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Thenumber7 New Member
since 2004-01-07
Posts 5 |
why nobody commented on this is beyond me. It supports the fact that you live and you die, everything else in between is what people remember you by, but when there dead too, your forgotten. |
||
|
rose Member
since 2003-08-02
Posts 53 |
Nobdy commented on it because it's way too cliche. |
||
|
ascending_ecstasy Member
since 2004-01-21
Posts 102 |
yeah. cliche. |
||
|
blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
*giggle* You know those little cliques in school where there's one really popular person and all his/her followers, and everything the 'leader' says, all the 'followers' agree with? Well, the last couple of comments suddenly reminded me of that. Anyway, I don't think of this as poetry, exactly... maybe something between Haiku (although the formatting isn't right, it has the feel) and just thinking out loud. If you're really aiming for poetry here, try expanding on the idea... and don't be too impatient with it, sometimes the best poetry takes months to come together correctly. I like the feeling you're starting with, here... it could really turn into something nice. |
||
|
Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
the poem or haiku you are replying to is just my little two cents at the end of a post the real poem didn't get on to the post because of server problems when you live you begin to die |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
