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Teen Poetry #7

Lost

Manth88
Junior Member

since 2003-06-15

Posts 45
IL, USA

0 posted 2004-02-18 10:17 PM

Sometimes I wander,
What I would do,
When the day came,
That I lost you.
Do you know,
What you would put me through?
I would be lost,
If I couldn't have you.
It would be like breathing,
Without the air.
And then I guess all I could do,
Is pray and care.
You will always be in my dreams,
And my heart will always gleam.
For you are the one,
Who made me complete.
But now you are gone,
And we must part.
Stop! Done! Kapish!

By: Sam

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-02-18 10:32 PM

wow.
"I would be lost, If i couldn't have you"
I feel that way about someone also. Very nice first post.
~Vampire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Ixxi
Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 77
England

2 posted 2004-02-19 04:13 PM

This is gonna sound really mean, but I found a lot of it kind of boring. The only part that got my attention a little bit was the part about "breathing without the air".

jaysh
Member

since 2003-04-16

Posts 133
IL, USA

3 posted 2004-02-19 08:58 PM

i like it

Manth88
Junior Member

since 2003-06-15

Posts 45
IL, USA

4 posted 2004-02-19 10:05 PM

Hey llxi there is nothing wrong with being truthful. Thanx for making it obvious that I need to livin up a few things. So thanx

*^!Manth88!^*

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