I fell in the way of that car

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Teen Poetry #7

I fell in the way of that car

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-02-18 09:15 PM

A gun shows through your smile
Pull the trigger with your tongue.
The explosion only enters my ears
And bleeds my heart inside my chest.
I'll wink at you and smile back
For the pain loves me more than you.
Another thing that you have lost to me,
Don't you feel neglected now?
Go shed rain on your own black sunshine
And leave me my darkness playing lover.
Send the driving back to the liars,
The ones who sent them to collect you and i.
Let's not go, i'll share this pain,
Let's not go, i'll let you hide too.
Go dig a hole to bury us in forever,
We'll lie in the pothole for those cars.
so walk away after all the tears have been loosed
And we've wasted enough time feeling what i wrote.
So pass me by while i wave goodbye in the picture frame,
But that won't seem to be enough some how...not nearly

now im alone, but not lonely like before

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-02-18 10:48 PM

Ahh.. another amazing write.

lol This poem was...just wow. I can relate, and understand this so perfectly. I admit i had to read it more than once for it to finally sink in, but once it did.....Till next time i guess.
~Vampire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Manth88
Junior Member

since 2003-06-15

Posts 45
IL, USA

2 posted 2004-02-19 10:08 PM

I like it alot

*^!Manth88!^*

drummerboy678
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 134

3 posted 2004-02-20 12:06 PM

Damn man, another killer poem. The first lines are just incredible.

I also like simple lines, like:
For the pain loves me more than you.

So simple, but it works so well.

Anyways, great job with this one. Like all your poems, has so many levels. Another great one.

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