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Teen Poetry #7

More Dreams without sleep

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-02-03 03:20 PM

this is another song i wrote for that contest.enjoy. or dont. just give me feedback

More Dreams without sleep

Dark eyes and completed lies
Split up this American Dream.
I'll fade behind these broken lines
Hoping to live something more.

Blackened lies and forgiving eyes
Search for what was lost before.
I'll wait behind this strangled night
Gasping for one more chance to breathe.

One last prayer sent above,
One more day to spend away,
Wishing only for uncouth love
And i hold onto this night though its cold.

If i coud coldly cry
I would sleep in those tears.
I i could just know why
My fears hold me down tonight.

Bleeding past all those so high,
I creep and creak for you,
Left here on this bed i lie,
You can make me believe lies again.

(Where are you?)
Where are all your perfect lies?
(Where am i?)
Where is the life that dies?

now im alone, but not lonely like before

Snickers123
Member

since 2004-05-07

Posts 94
United States-Iowa

1 posted 2004-08-03 01:11 PM

I liked it, lots of emotion, good write!!

~*.:Leah:.*~

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-08-03 05:06 PM

thanks a lot

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-08-04 11:32 PM

Yeah, i really liked this. The flow, and imagery was great...

I loved the ending. It couldnt have been any better.

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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