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It's a Long Road, With No Shoes (please read)
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It's a Long Road, With No Shoes (please read) |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
You screamed at me to listen but I knew what you would say you don't know me you only see what you want. You screamed at me to listen and tore my hands from my ears I lost all reason then as past fears flooded in. It hurt more when you called me selfish over and over again than when your fist hit my spine you don't know me, it hurts more that you believe so strongly that I am so selfish. I knew I had to leave then before one of us got hurt I knew I had to leave then because I wasn't seeing you, I was seeing him. It was a long road, with no shoes but if I had to I would have run until my feet bled. Because I wasn't seeing you, I was seeing him. I know you didn't mean to hurt me and I didn't mean to scream that I hate you so why did you push, and why did I scream? It was a long walk, with no shoes a lonely road with everyone staring and not stopping. I ran out of breath before the end and collapsed to let my tears fade I took the road slower when I got up and the pebbles dug into my feet. I didn't have time to grab my shoes I could only dart for the door I didn't have time to grab my shoes you would have had me again. And I know one of us would have gotten hurt because you were mad and I was afraid, I hate to be afraid. The past floods my mind, I see his fist and his face the reaction I learned all those years ago is to lash out when Im afraid. I don't know pain and you don't know mercy. The tunnel grew colder as the day wore on the writing on the wall said, "You don't understand" I knew the words rang true. Those three simple words were so profound to me I applied them to you, and they explained everything. I don't know pain and you don't know mercy. I wasn't seeing you, I was seeing him. W.W. We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves? Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell. [This message has been edited by WinterWren (02-02-2004 09:59 PM).] |
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monkey Junior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 27 |
hey steph, im glad you decided to post this one. its really good and the words you chose are really emotional and it makes us feel what you are writing about. its really an awesome poem even tho its sad, love you! |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Hey shorty  . Thanks for replying, it really means alot. *sigh* I guess no one else is going to.W.W. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Wow. There's a lot of emotion in this piece. I really liked it, it told a story and was really well written. Thanks for sharing this.  - C.K. Natland - |
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Ixxi Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 77England |
This poem certainly moved me. I love this kind of thing, when people express their emotions as well as making it an interesting piece of writing rather than JUST venting anger. Well done. Peace |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Its been awhile since I have read your work, and I am SO glad that I read this. I feel so much compassion for you, after reading this. It sounds like its about your boyfriend, who was violent and reminded you of your dad. WOW. These lines struck me hard: "I don't know pain and you don't know mercy" "a lonely road with everyone staring and not stopping." Excellent write, and if it is a true story. I hope things improve hun. ~Lex |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Thank you all so much for your replies, they mean alot to me. Lexy: Thank you for your heartfelt reply. Actually it's about my sister. She wasn't reminding me of my dad, same story, just a different person. Again, thank you so much for the reply! W.W. |
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