Teen Poetry #7 |
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Lights In The Eyes of The Blind |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN ![]() |
Lights In The Eyes of The Blind Sleep intrigues the minds of those Who watch the lies of the eyes in the light. Maybe there is never enough darkness inside To make us wish for the coming day, Maybe there is never enough light inside To make us wish for the darkening gray. Ash should blow like whirling snow And dance upon the Sunday dresses of us all. Maybe there is never enough religion to burn The sins of our core that lie on our Sunday best, Maybe there is never enough water to quench The thirst hidden inside the mouths of the rest. Forgotten are the nights of lost summers and Hands held high in gleeful aqua play. Maybe this ash that falls is snow, Brought for us to purify our souls and minds, Maybe the lack of color shows us that variety Lies to the believers of the spell that unbinds. Roads needing to be cleared, tears that need to be freed, Truth buries itself only wishing to be found. Maybe this all adheres the lies and the truth To our thinking and loves lost beliefs, Maybe this splits hairs by split decisions And this is to be found just another motif. now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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EverRuss Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 66Indiana |
Great poem. I have no clue why no one has replied to this!? "Forgotten are the nights of lost summers"...that is my favorite line..true it is.. so many things happen in the summer If my poems could talk they would mean more than the words |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks alot. i was wondering why no one had commented either. |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I like the tone that you take with this piece. Instead of using the obvious and overly used words, the boring words, I enjoyed your use of language. The word "motif" in the last line especially stuck out to me. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thank you allysa. i always appreciate your feedback. ya i really try to create ideas and images that stick out and words that aren't used that much help alot. now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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