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Toasty Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 74my little hole in wisconsin |
Unbroken and wondering how I'd gotten this way a token good girl but gone astray bleeding from fights and emotional scars needing a dream to escape to the stars alone and unable to just get a grip a drone needing space a faraway trip finding acceptance a chance to be free binding is broken someone trusts me learning that sometimes life isn't fair turning to find that someone cares laughing 'cause joy has entered my life loving despite everything... he is my life "Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales. |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
Great work! This was AWESOME! ~Jess  "Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse |
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Olive_8 Junior Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 41Canada |
I totally loved it!! I know how you feel and I am glad that I can relate to someone! Thanks! |
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Toasty Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 74my little hole in wisconsin |
 I'm glad you like. Thanks for reading!~toasty "Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
This is a nicely penned piece, Patricia. I enjoyed the rhythm and flow as well as the ontent. Well done.  ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Oh a happy one! YAY! I've been waiting for one of these! Beautifully done, I really liked the way that you spaced out your lines and wording so that certain phrases were lingered on more than others. It was a tecnique that made you think about the words in the poem. Lovely job I enjoyed this imensely! ~Live and Laugh~ The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
this was a darn tight poem. the rhyming was very very nice. loved it!!it captured me nicely |
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Toasty Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 74my little hole in wisconsin |
Thankyou for all the feedback guys. I'm glad you liked it. ~toasty "Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales. " life isn't about the things that happen to you, it's about how you react to them" [This message has been edited by Toasty (09-23-2003 07:59 PM).] |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
This was good. Thanks for the read and keep 'em coming. "I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park |
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Toasty Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 74my little hole in wisconsin |
wow...  thankyou~toasty "Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales. |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
yes, it swings both ways doesnt? |
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