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young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2003-12-09 07:09 PM

the next 2 poems that i post are for my cousin nic. he's 22 and his wife just died and the mayo clinic. he watched her die...she was 99% brain on sunday and late that night they took her off life support. she died immediately. he's incredibly torn up now, to the point of . these are for him.

forever after and never

she was alive but ded to the world,
even the one she loved most: you.
you're caught in a struggle between
keeping her and what you have to do.
you've got two sides to your coin,
both drenched in uncomforting tears.
the decision to let her go is
tearing you apart and will for upcoming years.
machines keep her heart beating longer
and you pray to god for healing.
you've made all the deals you can
but deth always seems to be cheatiing.
your comfort wont be found in us,
wont be found at the end of a gun,
its a comfort unseen, but felt strongly,
something that only comes when you're stunned.
i pray that in your darkest hour,
when all the guns and knives have been hdden
and all you want is for life totake you away,
that god will give you what you think is .
peace to settle your heart that's broken,
peace to heal the destroyed hopes in your head.
take comfort in knowing that you'll see here again,
once the funeral roses have faded and carnations bloom instead.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

[This message has been edited by young_blood (12-09-2003 08:07 PM).]

duncan idaho
Member

since 2003-11-14

Posts 70
dune

1 posted 2003-12-09 07:26 PM

thats skillfully written work.
your poetry, by far, is the best on this
little forum.

your world is only as your senses percieve it. what happens when we lose our senses? heaven? nice try, play again.

duncan idaho
Member

since 2003-11-14

Posts 70
dune

2 posted 2003-12-09 07:28 PM

oops, my distorted ego got away.
maybe that signature of mine isn't too
comforting right now, sorry.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2003-12-09 07:40 PM

ummm...ok...thanks i guess...

now im alone, but not lonely like before

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2003-12-09 08:06 PM

this is so very touching, and I am so sorry for your loss of family....I hope through these words, nic will find some comfort and peace....
Lauren~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

5 posted 2003-12-09 08:09 PM

i'm not sure if this would help him any, so im not sure if i should give it to him

now im alone, but not lonely like before

PrincessNets
Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

6 posted 2003-12-09 10:27 PM

that poem is so sad. So well written. I hope that Nic can find some comfort for the pain he is going through. It is rough losing someone you love. I am so sorry for your family's loss. I hope things can be better in the future.
-Jeanette-

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

7 posted 2003-12-10 09:27 PM

good job with this one.. and so sorry to hear about this tragedy. I especially liked the last line. very good.

sorry to hear about yoru loss..

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

8 posted 2003-12-12 02:37 PM

this reminded me of when a good friend of mine was on life support. After loosing both of his parents, her brother had to make the decision as to whether or not she would remain on life support. In the end, he decided to take her off life support, and instead of just loosing his parents, he lost a sister as well.

very nice write. Condolences to your cousin and you.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

9 posted 2003-12-12 02:52 PM

once again thank you for all the comments, nic is holding up ok. he's moving away b/c he cant stand to see anything that reminds him of his wife, it hurts too bad.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

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