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Teen Poetry #7

I'm Through

lauren03
Member

since 2002-01-04

Posts 64
oh, usa

0 posted 2003-12-07 10:31 PM

I'm through with all your lies
I'm through with all the sighs
This isn't my fault,
I didn't ask for this

I'm through with tomorrow,
there's never been a tomorrow!!!
Why did you borrow when you couldn't give back?
You always said there's tomorrow.....

so go ahead look back, blame me..........
it's always been my fault,
but this mess is all you....

you lied and you played me for a fool,
how could you act so cruel?

what went wrong or did everything go just right?
I'm tired of fighting,
I'm tired of crying,
I'm tired of being mad,
but most of all I'm tired of being sad over you!!!
this makes no sense

although nothing makes sense anymore

I don't make sense
You don't make sense
We don't make sense
My poem don't make sense....

this makes no sense!!!!!

duncan idaho
Member

since 2003-11-14

Posts 70
dune

1 posted 2003-12-08 02:33 PM

yay!, your last stanza rocks! i don't know about the rest......

PrincessNets
Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

2 posted 2003-12-08 04:57 PM

Hmmm.. that was interesting. I liked the last line. I think that it's great when someone can laugh at themself... overall the poem was ok.

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

3 posted 2003-12-08 06:38 PM

I liked it, it was interesting but the last stanza kind of brings some humor to it, while keeping the emotion you wanted to get across, nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

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