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Teen Poetry #7

Deciding..plz respond

adbdesperado18
Junior Member

since 2003-11-30

Posts 33

0 posted 2003-12-06 12:27 PM

Alone I sit,
In a bleak,
Aphotic,
Barren, room
With hollowest of walls,
Wondering,
The reasons of deformities,
Believing,
I impelled blinds to shut,
Pondering,
If anyone truly cares,
Knowing,
They overlook
The hurting of my skin,
Realizing,
I exist unaided
In this pitiless, jagged
Wasteland,
Boreing
Into my echo
Through spattered glass,
Debating,
If deserted room,
Hollow walls,
Retain value enough
To endure my sores,
And the many more to come.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2003-12-06 06:39 PM

Painful and sad; being left in the darkness can be so lonely.
Nice to meet you, adbdesperado18, welcome to Pips.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-12-06 06:48 PM

This one really hurts. It's very sad.
I hope that it isn't written from personal experience.
Hugs to you,

Ethel

titch k
Member

since 2003-11-25

Posts 123

3 posted 2003-12-06 08:27 PM

there is a great depth to your verse
have you ever read the bronte sisters?
as your verse talk to me of their verse

I hope just in my humble critique
you will find a little happiness to hold
til blue skies arrive
love Titch

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