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KuruShio
Member

since 2003-11-18

Posts 110

0 posted 2003-12-02 09:55 PM

Her hair outshines the sun
Yet she hides it
Emerald eyes like stars new hung
Yet she hides them
Secrets entrenched in cloth
Unseen by man, yet held aloft
Beauty may have tarried here
Yet only viewed in the mirror
Am I beautiful she queries me?
But how to answer how to fathom
I am the first I am Adam
I reach out and take her hand
Are you pretty as the sky?
Beautiful still as you sleeping lye
You are more dazzling than the sun
Hiding behind the moon for fun
In beauty wreathed. In perfection free.
Yet no one else can see but me

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2003-12-03 12:20 PM

Good job on this poem.
I thought you wrote it well

-j-

Look at the sun and burn your eyes. You'll be fine in the end.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

2 posted 2003-12-03 03:30 PM

I liked this too. Well done.

Tell me, how does it feel, to treat me like you do?~Orgy

muchos
Member

since 2003-11-29

Posts 102

3 posted 2003-12-03 03:35 PM

this poem was totally awesome. i wish a guy would write about me like that. but then again, not all guys are sweet. good job, keep writin, i like your work

KuruShio
Member

since 2003-11-18

Posts 110

4 posted 2003-12-03 10:43 PM

thanks much, I gave her a copy today it was rather interesting she asked me to write a poem for her for xmas about 2 seconds before I handed it to her she smiled and shivered as she embraced me. I think I could end up loveing this one.

Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless.
KuruShio (DeadlyBob)

Mysilentsaviour25
Junior Member

since 2006-04-10

Posts 12
California

5 posted 2006-04-10 04:05 PM

I love the first 4 lines in this poem. They're beautiful. Congrats, on a well written poem.

Never stop smiling, you never know whos falling in love with it!

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

6 posted 2006-04-10 04:24 PM

This is an amazig poem...very sweet. i loved it! i look forward to reading more of your poems

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