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Teen Poetry #7

Serendipity

Cinderelly
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since 2001-12-31

Posts 189
NM, USA

0 posted 2004-11-03 04:50 PM

Fate created mistake
lost and left looking
I fell into you.

Whirlwind of trouble
clouds overhead
What will come 1st?
Your love or the rain?

It's just the same old game.

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

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1 posted 2004-11-03 05:02 PM

Liked it, although I felt that it was too short. Just my opinion, but I feel you should add on to it.

Great start though!

~Alli~

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HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

2 posted 2004-11-04 11:05 AM

It may be short, but I think it is great the way it is. Sometimes less really is more, though you couldn't tell from my recent poems. I sometimes felt that I ruined some of my poems by continuing to write them. This is one of many poems I've read that proove that great things do come in small packages. Great write!

-Rich

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~DreamChild~
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

3 posted 2004-11-13 08:54 PM

hey hey this was really cool!

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Mysilentsaviour25
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since 2006-04-10

Posts 12
California

4 posted 2006-04-10 04:24 PM

Wow Serendipity was an amazing choice for a title for this poem Serendipity-"a fortunate accident" would be the correct definition for the word. Nonetheless, honestly this is my favorite word. Ever seen the movie....? John Cusack! Idk i really like this....post more. I really enjoyed it!

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