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stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

0 posted 2006-09-01 01:11 AM

From twilight to dusk her heart seduces
Through the windows of a delicate soul
Those haunted eyes, whispering a forsaken lullaby
An abyss of bittersweet, concrete, memories
Intoxicating all who surround her frigid façade
With beautifully induced words not meant to allure
She captures you without one thought
Stealing you away like a fluttering scarlet carousel
Attracting your attention in your move of a fatal distraction…

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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JosephF
Junior Member

since 2006-08-30

Posts 30

1 posted 2006-09-01 06:09 AM

Excellent, Pure Brilliance

patience_iago
Member

since 2006-08-30

Posts 54

2 posted 2006-09-01 03:39 PM

I love this, i reread it like a dozen times, amazing.

A few lines really get you.

"There are some days where i believe i might die of an overdose of satisfaction"
-Dali

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

3 posted 2006-09-01 04:58 PM

woah. i dont think my mind can comprehend all this at once! once again, i am amazed at your talent. looks like your not-being-able-to-write episode wore off...??
hahaha

amazing piece stargal

Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

4 posted 2006-09-01 05:09 PM

hmmm...I really need to think about this one to comprehend exactly what it is your trying to get across. And after i do i am in shock at the depth. I find that as i look at more and more of your poetry, i really admire the creative mind you were given. Your poetry really does have to be taken seriously both as a poem, and as a piece of soul.
Exelent poem,
~Tempest~

This is the only life you have, so live it to be remembered

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2006-09-01 09:44 PM

Wonderful write! I love the style and the way you wrote this.
Hope to read more soon.

~Alli~

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

6 posted 2006-09-03 12:25 PM

Thanks for the comments ya'll, much appreciated by me

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

7 posted 2006-09-03 12:41 PM

This one is slightly different then your usual style, but again ... refreshing. I admire you Stargal. Different works for you, when most ppl try to break away from the usual ''accepted style'' they seem as tho they are trying to hard. You are one of a kind, and an amazing poet.

Much love,
Michelle

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

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