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Fallen angels |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Angels, fallen from the sky you sunk so low, from so high evicted from heaven for your crime now to spend life here, for all of time all of our world was to you everything different, all of this new angels thrown out of the clouds lost in earth, till you were found you fly no more never again to soar wings just vanished when you were banished you used to live in a place without sins ‘Till your curiosity got too much sealed it, so as an angel all done there are people so sweet, so nice often accused of being an angel in disguise you might wonder could they be fallen angels, who just seem like you and me these angels know nothing about their new home if they find each other, together but still alone their peers also exiled, reminds them of what they lost invincible in kindness, an army that can't be stopped Fallen angels for high above doomed to earth to teach about love maybe, we are all in a way angels to someone in our life we could all be such, Angels fallen from the sky. [This message has been edited by rhia_5779 (09-01-2006 03:12 AM).] |
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nostalgic*pride Member
since 2006-08-23
Posts 122NowhereVille |
Alright, I really liked this a lot. But, it could do with some SERIOUS editing. A few typos and places where the wording was off. But- overall- the poem was fantabulous! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Agreed with the suggestions from the person above me. But besides that, I found this poem really interesting. Nice job!  ~Alli~ |
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