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nostalgic*pride
Member

since 2006-08-23

Posts 122
NowhereVille

0 posted 2006-08-31 04:59 PM

We’ve always been in separate worlds
When sitting side by side
With so many problems we both face
It seems silly we should hide

So what if you’ve got pom-poms
And I haven’t got a spirit at all
We’re both in too much trouble
Not to catch the other when they fall

You’ve got your boyfriend
Sexy and cool
I’ve got my Goth friends
Freaks of the school

A million miles between us
Living the same lie
When daddy robbed the cradle
And ruined our lives

EXPLANATION: Yeah, I'm pretty much gothic, and I was molested by my dad a long time ago. Today, I found out that so has 'little miss popular'. =(

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

1 posted 2006-08-31 06:25 PM

wow, im really sorry. I liked this poem, i think maybe you tried a little TOO hard to make it rhyme, and my advice: poetry does NOT have to flow perfectly! just say what you feel, exactly, and try to just let it out w/o making it be too perfect. it was a really really good poem though, i really liked it.
and again, im sorry.
muchos amo amigo
-missy

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-08-31 07:27 PM

Hey I loved this.. I probably wouldn't have understand if you hadn't explained. I'm so sorry about his..

I love the ending about daddy robbing the cradle..

The last line I would add the word both.. It doesn't count up when you add it (syllable wise) but when you're reading it it sounds better
(and ruined both our lives)

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

3 posted 2006-09-01 04:51 AM

im really sorry. but i liked the poem alot. i liked the comparison of both of u with one thing the same but differnt lives

patience_iago
Member

since 2006-08-30

Posts 54

4 posted 2006-09-01 03:43 PM

When i read this, i sort of got it, but your explanation confirmed it.

Christ. Im so sorry for that happening, it shouldnt have happened to you, you didnt deserve it.

"There are some days where i believe i might die of an overdose of satisfaction"
-Dali

Bahigano
Junior Member

since 2008-05-13

Posts 31
Nebraska

5 posted 2008-05-14 11:16 AM

Hey, i'm new to pip but i think that your poem was awesome. really good i don't know why but i had to keep reading it over and over and i don't know why. thanks for posting it, it was awesome.
always
lea

wolfy09
Member

since 2008-06-10

Posts 93

6 posted 2008-06-12 02:59 AM

im so sorry that happened
great poem

lilmissflyaway
Junior Member

since 2009-01-19

Posts 15
ohio,usa

7 posted 2009-03-27 02:36 AM

I loved this poem , the raw emotion it , but i hate that it actually happened to you ,, i know how you feel ,, maybe thats why this poem really connected it was great

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

8 posted 2009-03-27 07:57 PM

This is a very poignant poem in that it shows, we are closer to each other than we realize. Sometimes we just don't know that someone could understand what we have been through, until the similarities surface. Well done!

~XxMz.NerdyRockstarxX~
Junior Member

since 2011-01-14

Posts 15
Alabama, United States

9 posted 2011-01-14 07:59 PM

I LOVE THIS POEM......AND BELIEVE IT OR NOT I WENT THROUGH THE SAME THING WITH A GIRL IN MY HIGH SCHOOL BUT NOW SHE'S MY BEST FRIEND LOL....SO GREAT JOB

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