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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! 
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Looking back at myself How could i be so used Listening to all those lies Made me so confused Mistaken for a friend You tore the flesh clean through Relentlessly slashing at my soul Nothing is all i can do Ghost in the shadows Taking the wrong advice Taking the easy way out Taking the easy life You betrayed all foundations Shaking the meaning of truth How can you sit there and tell me Its eye for an eye tooth for tooth |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Wow. YOu have a way with words that just send shivers down my spine.. The first stanza was good but the last 3 were very catchy and drew me into the poem Great job. ~Heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
Woah. this was seriously really good. I like it alot. i like the last 2 lines. not sure why but i like them. alot. i cant pick a favorite stanza cuz i like them all... nice job! |
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mgoodman1989 Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 93Iowa, USA |
"Ghost in the shadows Taking the wrong advice Taking the easy way out Taking the easy life" My favorite stanza. I can understand this one the most I think. Everyone tries to take an easier road every once in a while though. Great write, 10 outta 10! Lol, Keep 'em coming! Much Love, Michelle *I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!* |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Yes, this poem was really well written! Hope to see more from you soon!  ~Alli~ |
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patience_iago Member
since 2006-08-30
Posts 54 |
i really liked this "There are some days where i believe i might die of an overdose of satisfaction" |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
yeah i havta agree with everyone WOW  good write hope to hear more soon...hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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