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To those who will listen
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To those who will listen |
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nostalgic*pride Member
since 2006-08-23
Posts 122NowhereVille |
To those who will listen Let drift your mind The poem's not sweet My words are not kind To those who will listen Prepare for a war You'll hear what I say But not what it's for To those who will listen My pain is quite real You know who I am Yet ignore what I feel To those who will listen Please here my plea Send a light to the shadows To come rescue me To those who will listen My life isn't all pain I don't know what's wrong Perhaps I'm insane To those who will listen I'm wasting my breath Things just wont change Until I find death Uber depressing right? Cut me some slack. I was in a BAD (REALLY BAD) mood. And my anger just kind of came out, and the poem didn't turn out that good. |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
I thought it did make all since to me. It was really good too. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Hey.. I loved this poem. It's one of the best that I have read of yours. Absolutley amazing! I loved your first stanza.. it just kinda of drug me into the poem. "You'll hear what I say But not what it's for" ~These lines in the second stanza just made me think about a lot of stuff and how people listen to you but maybe not know what you mean.~ "You know who I am Yet ignore what I feel" ~Again the last two lines in this stanza were amazing. I feel like you put a lot of thought into this.~ The last stanza just kind of set it up just right. Even though is was kind of negative at the end. It was a great way to end it. I loved how you ended the poem with death becuase death ends life. So that's kind of like comparison.. (ex. It might have been weird to have the death part in the middle if ya know what i mean) great job.. I hope to hear more like this from you!! ~heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Aw, I think the poem turned out great! It's always good to let your anger out through poetry... Hope you're feeling better now.  ~Alli~ |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
yeah i can really relate, and it made a lot of sense. that was really good |
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JosephF Junior Member
since 2006-08-30
Posts 30 |
I can Relate to this a great deal, Very powerful and emotional. Lovely! |
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in_luv_06 New Member
since 2006-09-30
Posts 9 |
i can seriously relate!!! but death isn't the answer no matter what happens...trust me. Good Job! |
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