Teen Poetry #7 |
realizing, knowing, wishing, waiting |
buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
realizing that he had actually left she sat down and cried cried until she had no more tears then she wished she'd died. knowing that he would never come back broke her hopeful heart she tried to pick up the pieces but she didn't have the strength to start. wishing for someone else to love she prayed to her perfect God so she waited for her prayers to be answered heavenly and angelically clod. waiting for something to happen seeing it never would she knew know her heart was torn open and it would remain that way for good. realizing knowing wishing waiting none of my hearts questions. . . ever answered. ~missy |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
i liked this alot. it had some spelling errors in it.. but I'm not the best speller either good job.. i really like how you pulled it together at the end ~heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
i liked the ending alot that really wrapped it up and i liked the second stanza alot |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
"knowing that he would never come back broke her hopeful heart she tried to pick up the pieces but she didn't have the strength to start." My favorite part; The whole poem just seemed to flow so well with every stanza; every stanza seemed to fit... I loved this poem, it's really one of my favorites by you. It's different than all of your other poems - I liked it a lot! Thanks for sharing! "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
thank you heather, rhia, and stargal! wow stargal, im really suprised! i didn't think it was one of my best, but i tried hard on this one [a wee bit more] to rhyme all the way through the poem, and tried to make it flow a little bit more. it just kinda came to me[realizing] that i never knew who to love. and i wished someone would come to me one day, which would be waiting. then i had all those words and decided to use them! thanks alot y'all, i really like replies! muchos amo amigos -missy |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I really enjoyed this one by you. I think you did a good job, it flowed nicely. ~Alli~ |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
thanks again alli=) |
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