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buttercupbaby
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0 posted 2006-08-28 01:31 PM



i just realized
what we had was fake
when you said "i love you baby"
it was for your boredom's sake.


you had not had fun]
in oh so very long a while
and innocent me you saw
and fufilled your thoughts, though vile.


poor me, i think now
sad and hurt
realizing now though i don't want to
you were such a jerk.


you hurt my very gut
not to mention broke my heart
i thought you loved me, and i loved you back
from the very start


but it was a lie
just like you
i never though i'd say this
but i never had a clue


i though i was in love, finally too.
and you knew you were succesfully tricking me
you knew it, didn't you?

© Copyright 2006 Marisa F - All Rights Reserved
the_girl_next_door
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1 posted 2006-08-28 10:18 PM


I really like this.. so many girls can probably relate to the kind of guy that is munipulative.. great write..

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2006-08-29 12:03 PM


i can relate to this in a way... but i liked this it made sense to write it and the title drew me in good post...
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

buttercupbaby
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3 posted 2006-08-30 09:21 AM


thank you heather & hunnie! i am really glad y'all replied.
-missy

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4 posted 2006-08-31 12:03 PM


Yes, I agree that many girls can relate to this -- I know I can!  Keep writing, I enjoyed this.

~Alli~

buttercupbaby
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5 posted 2006-08-31 06:26 PM


thanks alot alli=)
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