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buttercupbaby
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since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

0 posted 2006-08-25 12:51 PM

I met someone knew today
that took my mind off you
in every single way
your a little too late

now you decide you want me back
but what im gonna say
is sorry babe
your a little too late

its a little too late
for you to decide to love me
a little too late for your tears
its a little too late
to re-hurt me

you want me back
but you cant have me, you see.
its a little too late
to wanna be with me forever

its over hun, your way too late.

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

1 posted 2006-08-26 01:29 PM

it kindda sounds like JO Jo's new song you're a lil too late.But other then the spelling mistakes I thought it was ok i guess.

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

2 posted 2006-08-26 05:23 PM

i was listening to that song when i wrote it, it inspired me..lol.=)

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2006-08-26 11:56 PM

i thpught it was good... really made sense

good post:P
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

4 posted 2006-08-27 10:35 AM

thank you very much!
where have your poems been??

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2006-09-03 09:12 PM

Good for you for saying no to this person! They just sound like they only want you back now that you've finally started to move on.
Thanks for sharing!

~Alli~

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

6 posted 2006-09-04 05:18 PM

I think its great that you used Jojo's lyrics to "inspire" you, however it seemed as though you tried way to hard to be exactly like it. It was a nice write, but personally, not something that I would add to my library, because of its seemingly un-originality.

Sorry if it seems harsh in anyway, its just not one of my favorites.

Keep posting, I promise not to be so harsh on the next one

Much love,
Michelle

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

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