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WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

0 posted 2006-08-18 11:30 PM

He watches her laugh with her friends,
in a dress he's never seen.
There's no more dark clouds in her blue eyes,
though they're still in his green.

She's tossing her head back and laughing,
flirting with some other guy.
He hardly recognizes her anymore,
she's spreading her wings, getting ready to fly.

She's moving on,
and he's been left behind.
She's trying to forget about him,
but she's always on his mind.
Two years of being in love,
he left without a second glance.
After two months of being alone,
he wants a second chance.

Now, he could have a nother,
he's handsome enough to just need one look.
But no girl has asked, no ne dared,
because his misery's made him an open book.
And it's not like she's over him,
she's still handling the loss.
She'd take him back without question,
but he won't ask because

She's moving on,
and he's been left behind.
She's trying to forget about him,
but she's always on his mind.
Two years of being in love,
he left without a second glance.
After two months of being alone,
he wants a second chance.

He wishes to God she still loved him
the funny thing is that she does.
He can't believe all the nights she cried,
but he knows that he's the cause.

Part of him hates her, for being so okay,
another part just wants her back.
But he'll never ask, he's just too proud,
He won't cut himself some slack.

She's moving on,
and he's been left behind.
She's trying to forget about him,
but she's always on his mind.
Two years of being in love,
he left without a second glance.
After two months of being alone,
he wants a second chance.

~This is about a particularly stupid, bull-headed guy friend of mine who just...grr!~

When I stopped trying to find the right guy, and concentrated on being the right girl, the right guy found me.

broken_smile1469
Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

1 posted 2006-08-19 01:37 AM

hey Great Poem! kinda reminds me of a song...? well good job!! i really liked this poem

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-08-19 07:46 PM

Hi WaterFairy103,

I kind of agree it does sound kind of song-ish? It could be just the form you put it in but I think it would make an awesome song...

"She's moving on,
and he's been left behind.
She's trying to forget about him,
but she's always on his mind.
Two years of being in love,
he left without a second glance.
After two months of being alone,
he wants a second chance."

My favorite part^^ It just seemed to flow so well and it was kind of sad. The whole poem is kind of sad, yet, kind of happy. Sad that they both still love each other and are to proud to say anything but happy because she's moving on? It's kind of confusing... Not the poem, but to explain why I like the poem so much...

I think you did a great job with this one though. Although, it is not one of my favorite by you I still enjoyed it a bunch.

Thanks for sharing

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

3 posted 2006-08-20 02:27 PM

She'd take him back without question,
but he won't ask because

Love this part. I really liked the whole idea of this poem, very cute. yet sad.

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

4 posted 2006-08-20 02:28 PM

It cut off my post :[ anyways, is this supposed to be a song? cause it would make a pretty cute/sad song if you put music to it. Keep it up!

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