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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513
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Where is my friend? Where has she gone? Has her stay been so short? Or rather too long? What have they done? You’re so different now. Before anyone Forever you’ll bow. What are her morals? Are you sure they are good? I’ll tell you I don’t like it. Do you think I should? I support your decision. But you must know it hurts. In the case of our friendship Has worst come to worst? |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hi pen&paper, I'm not quite sure what to think of this poem at the moment. It seems like you really care about the person in this but you sound kind of distant in your writing. Like you are just pondering someone else that you don't even know, no offence. It's kind of different to read something like that but ... I do like it, just not sure why I like it yet. "What are her morals? Are you sure they are good? I’ll tell you I don’t like it. Do you think I should?" One of my favorite parts in the whole poem^^ I believe it is because you brought up what her morals were. It plays a large part in my life, morals that is, and I liked seeing it as a question in the poem... Great job and thanks for sharing, I think I will go back and re-read this again, I feel like I'm missing something? lol...  "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I really like this one.. it's very simple but it get's the point across. Great job.. ~heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
thanks guys! |
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