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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK 
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I was so sure I liked you for good. You told me you'd treat me, Just as you should. But then things became complicated, When I found out you lied, I don't know why I bothered, I don't know why I tried. At first I was unsure about you, Then you turned on the charms, So that all to soon, You had me eatin out of you palm. Why couldn't you have just been straight with me, Why did you bother to lie? You didn't need to impress me, There wasn't anything to hide. Recently I've been thinking about it, And I just wander why, I really believed you, So frustrated I could cry. Belinda Black |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
i actually know what you are going through. I've also been thinking about my ex lately and i can't get him out of my head, only b/c everything reminds me of him. But this part in your poem just reminds me of me Recently I've been thinking about it, And I just wonder why, I really believed you, So frustrated I could cry. Thanks for getting my own emotions out. if you know what i mean. But I hope you can work things out with whom ever is giving you a rough time. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hi Belinda, I must say that I liked this poem a lot! I really seemed to feel your emotions while reading this. It was sad, angry, yet in some ways beautiful... "When I found out you lied, I don't know why I bothered, I don't know why I tried. " My favorite part^^ Plus the part cherrys_rule mentioned also. This one I felt was good because the flow is good and it's something I can relate too a lot! It was awesome to be able to read some of your work and I'll hope you'll continue to post in the near future Thanks for sharing!  "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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