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Teen Poetry #7

Lost

Tempest
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since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
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0 posted 2006-08-10 09:49 AM

Lost and wondering,
A young boy stumbles through the woods
He hears a noise slightly to his right
The fear grows as he takes off out of sight

He's so lost and desprate
His fear is tangible air
You would be scared too
If you looked into his stare

Chased by made up creatures
Wandering out at night
He only has himself
As he waits for the light

He hears every sound
Every step, Every breath
Always at the edge of reason
Because your always at your best

Light will come eventually
He tells himself too frequently
As holds on for the light
Then he's out, he's free
His moment has arrived

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2006-08-10 02:09 PM

i thought this was good; it had a nice flow,and was a good length.......good job.
Krysti*

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cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

2 posted 2006-08-10 06:39 PM

I really like this one. I wouldn't be able to point out any good details or anything, b/c it was all very good. Hope to see more on here from you.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-08-11 12:59 PM

Well, I liked this; It reminds me of one time when I got lost in the woods - I made up a million things about monsters eating me... lol

Seriously though, this was a neat poem - Not as good as some of your others but I still found it to be an interesting read...

Thanks for sharing

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
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