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Beside me
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513
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“You can’t take on the world You’ll just break down You’ll turn your smile Into a frown It may sound crazy But its true” Those are my words For you To say to me When I’ve lost hope When I’m lost and trying to grope My way through dark tunnels Corridors and alleys Over large hills And across long valleys I can’t do this alone I need you to guide me I need you to walk, run, and stand Beside me |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I liked this poem. It makes sense and it has a great lesson on life for everyone in it. Sometimes we try too hard to be perfect when we can't be, we try to take on the weight of the world when we need to just sit back and relax at times. I think you explained that very well in this poem. The rhythm in this was very nice, it seemed to fit the whole poem together, it helped make the poem work. Great job with that! Thanks for sharing  @-->--- |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I can’t do this alone I need you to guide me I need you to walk, run, and stand Beside me. good poem.... thanx for sharing. Krysti* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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