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Too Shy For You
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Too Shy For You |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain 
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In my eyes it twinkled like the shining star That twinkled only where you are In my eyes it shone so bright and true And dedicated all its rays to you In my eyes was where it announced itself To me, to you, and to everyone else It wrote letters across my eyes Letters that were not in disguise Letter after letter, line after line With a ray of light that was so fine One chapter, then another, they were all the same They started and ended with your name The story simply went on and on With the people reading each line along They all knew the truth, it traveled all around I heard them whisper as I turned around They told of the time when you asked me to dance How I had seemed to jump at the chance How it seemed like, for just a moment in time I had believed that you were mine How tender your touch had seemed to be How my hand seemed to melt so willingly How stronglyi let you hold my hand How gently you brushed that falling strand For fear it would disturb the grace That shone so brightly from your face How I looked into your eyes like they had no end How did i manage through heartahce,To laugh and call you friend How I had only listened, never whispered a word How I had drowned away the world How you laughed nonchalantly and failed to realize What everyone saw written in my eyes How your heart and soul seemed to be blind To the truth that screamed up in my mind The truth I kept so deep inside The truth I had always tried to hide When they snickered and asked me, I had to deny I told them that it was all a lie Yet they knew better, cause when they heard my sigh They knew I was just too shy Too shy to admit what they knew was true That I was... in love... with you |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
i liked it a lot hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
One chapter, then another, they were all the same They started and ended with your name I loved those lines. This was a greaaat poem, I loved your descriptions and how it was a story almost. Keep it up! myspace username-beautiful_tragidy |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Wow! I loved this; it was really, really, like a story to me. With "you" as the actress, narrator, and writer of the show. It was simply amazing, to me, how you were able to describe everything in such great detail. I loved the descriptiveness a lot. That is part of what makes this an amazing poem. Plus I just loved the first 3 stanzas! One thing I always like to see in poems that I read is good form, great "plot" to the "story", amazing descriptiveness, and interesting words, I must admit that in this poem I see all of the above! You are one talented writer! Thanks for sharing  @-->--- |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
wow...that was suprising! i finally got everyone to like a poem i've written! wow..that made my day reading that! thank y'all soOo much! ~missy |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
They told of the time when you asked me to dance How I had seemed to jump at the chance How it seemed like, for just a moment in time I had believed that you were mine i loved this stanza....i don't know why but something made me go back and read this poem again:P good write. Krysti* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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