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Artofmark Junior Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 41 |
gentle is my touch and smooth is your skin for i never knew i could love so much to hold you is what i desire and to kiss o so sweet and to believe that we ever did meet for you are my flower always blooming no matter the time and my love always there no matter the hour for your love there is no great enough crime for not seeing you is why i cower to be with you is nothing but sublime. |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
WOW! I really like everything in this poem. There's nothing to point out to you for the parts that were my favorite, b/c everything was just amazing. You did a nice job on this poem. Thanks for sharing. |
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beautyincalvary Member
since 2006-07-13
Posts 98 |
The rhymes could flow a little better... they seem a bit forced. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Wow! I have to agree with cherrys_rule in this being an amazing poem! Although, I must admit, that I do have a favorite part. It would have to be the ending, "to be with you is nothing but sublime.", I'm not quite sure why, it could be because you use the word sublime or that the flow is nice, but I just like it. To me it's a great ending to a great poem. It's not weak, instead of pulling the poem down it kind of goes out with a BaNG! Okay, that might not make sense to anyone but me, I'm kind of tired and it's kind of late, but what I'm saying is that I liked the poem a lot. I hope you will continue to post more in the near future  @-->--- |
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Artofmark Junior Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 41 |
Thank you all for reading my poems, I hope to get a chance to read all of yours, :P |
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