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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
Member

since 2003-07-16

Posts 248

0 posted 2006-07-27 06:56 PM

(breaking down the barriers)
living for the ends
married to your work
(you never let her in)
missing faces of your past
pictures of fewer friends
forgetting lies you told
(when they meant the world to her)

its ever so simple
tired and true
working sleeping crying dreaming
(choosing)

you never had the intentions to hurt her.

When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better.
Mae West

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2006-07-27 08:36 PM

wow that was strong i liked it a lot too....hope to read more from you soon....
*hunnie*

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-07-27 10:42 PM

Keryn, this is great. it's not my favorite by you but it is really good. I can fell the emotion. Especially the last line.. great job..

I haven't heard from you in a while.. keep me posted on anything new. I miss reading your work.

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-07-28 08:58 AM

Wow... This is a really emotional piece for me, having known/knowing people that are like this.

I loved the emotion you put into this it is straightforward and truthful. I can really feel where this is coming from.

The last line, like Heather said was simply amazing! Short, yet, it held a powerful punch in it. Thanks a bunch for sharing

@-->---

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

4 posted 2006-07-28 02:02 PM

wow..that was emotional for me..i loved this. It was really really really good. Short and simple, i loved it.
-missy

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
Member

since 2003-07-16

Posts 248

5 posted 2006-08-01 11:09 PM

thanks everybody...

yeah Heather, I know, Ive been busy lately with blahh....but im going to post again soon *maybe tonight/tomorrow?*

<3ker

When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better.
Mae West

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