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pdean8 Junior Member
since 2006-01-14
Posts 11Queensland, Australia |
One minute we kiss And she said She loved me The next I can’t be with you And the feeling Of having Your heart Ripped Messily From it’s place It’s a pain Greater then Anything I’ve Ever felt A wound That will Never Fully Heal |
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oh_my_goshijustgotexcited Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 52USA, IDAHO |
you should post more poems!!! more often because i love your poetry! -later Viola |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
wow i really liked that it was great yea i agree you should post more too....hope to c more from you. *hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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pdean8 Junior Member
since 2006-01-14
Posts 11Queensland, Australia |
it can be hard for me to post poems, as all of my poems come from personal experiences, and are my emotions at the time |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Don't be afraid to post poems like that! WE all post poems expressing our personal emotions at times. If you prefer we don't "try" to give constrictive critiques on those, please just let us know. Cause, I agree, it's a pleasure to be able to read your poems. I liked how you did the ending on this, the one word stanza. It was awesome! I loved that, my favorite part  Thanks for sharing @-->--- |
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pdean8 Junior Member
since 2006-01-14
Posts 11Queensland, Australia |
I more meant I find it hard to post poems like that because I don't write too many |
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