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Teen Poetry #7

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broken_smile1469
Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

0 posted 2006-07-24 05:06 PM

I love the way you look at me
And the way you smile
The way you seem to make
My life feel worth while
I’ll never forget the sparkle
That appears in your eyes
Or the way you laugh
But never make me cry
You seem to be so perfect
Maybe the best guy in the world
I’m proud to be your girl
I can’t believe your mine
I can’t believe I’m yours
I love you more then anything
And I always will of course
My love will never fade
But will always be true
For this is why I say
I was meant to be with you

"in a world of cheerios, be a fruit loop"

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

1 posted 2006-07-24 06:39 PM

broken_smile1469,
Awww that was very sweet. i like the whole poem. i can't pick out any favorite parts of this poem b/c it was all so good.
thanks for sharing.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-07-24 06:52 PM

This is such a sweet poem! I loved reading it; it is light, happy, beautiful, romantic, and basically, something that makes you smile. It’s funny, but when I read love poems, that go right, I just can’t help but smile, they make me happy… this poem is no exception.

The ending, or so I thought, was really good, I liked that it wasn’t anything dramatic, yet it still left an impact on the reader. I think you did an excellent job with this poem.

Thanks so much for sharing

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oh_my_goshijustgotexcited
Member

since 2006-07-12

Posts 52
USA, IDAHO

3 posted 2006-07-26 01:09 AM

lol..ok this is just me, but i loved your poem, it was very heartfelt, and it was a happy poem! i havent read a happy poem on here in a while, maybe its just that i pick all the sad ones! this is a refreshing change! keep writing
-later

Viola

broken_smile1469
Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

4 posted 2006-07-27 12:44 PM

thanks for the comments!

"in a world of cheerios, be a fruit loop"

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